Thursday, October 18, 2012

The outline

the outline
of its wounded body—
this fit of rain
not bold enough
to wash it from my mind

Modern English Tanka, Autumn 2008

I still can see it.


  1. This is very powerful, Janet, especially as you do not name "it."
    And I like "this fit of rain," with its echo of "fit of weeping."
    The outline will linger in my mind, too.

  2. I appreciate the comments, Jenny! I seem to remember this one flowing out of me pretty much as is.

    The literal rain truly didn't wash away the outline on the concrete for quite a while - the outline that was visible after the body was removed. (And it wasn't me who removed it; I can't seem to do that sort of thing.)