Sunday, January 26, 2014

I meander

I meander
through tall pines,
before morning
find myself in a forest
of green flannel sheets

Modern English Tanka, Spring 2007



7 comments:

  1. This is great! The modern market does a good job (perhaps too good) of producing things that evoke pleasant comfort and familiarity in consumer goods – and l love the way that you’ve tucked that into this tanka so cleverly, that the lighthearted appeal of this piece is maintained.

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  2. I love the blending of dream & reality in this one!

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  3. hey, thanks, wendy and jenny. I literally may have been dreaming about a forest, though I wrote this 7 years ago and can't remember for sure.

    p.s. I realize the trees pictured above aren't pines. perhaps I should have said spruce or fir (though that would have been a lot of f's).

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  4. Haha! I love it! You surprised me with that last line. Perfect.

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  5. Good, I think I like to surprise! Thanks!

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  6. Don't try flannel sheets while wearing flannel pj's. It's like being glued to the bed.

    Adelaide

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  7. Oh, I don't know...sounds kind of nice to me. ;)

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