Thursday, September 4, 2014

A house spider

a house spider
jaunts across the tile—
the crannies
yet to be explored
within these walls

A Hundred Gourds, 2:4, September 2013

9 comments:

  1. I love your choice of "jaunts" and the metaphor that emerges from the last three lines!

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  2. Spiders make me "jaunt" across the floor! You always make the most skillful turns in your tanka.

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    1. Thank you, the two Jens!

      I never minded tiny spiders (and to me, some look cute). But after someone told me what happened to him after a small brown recluse bit him, I'm now kind of scared of all of them. ;)

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  3. Makes me think of a children's story - "The Jaunt of the House Spider" - charming and whimsical, Janet.

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    1. Thanks, Wendy. How funny: I've never heard of that story.

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  4. I love the deeper meaning in this - the parts of ourselves or our relationships or even the world around us that we have yet to explore... excellent tanka!

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    1. thank you, susan, for your post. yes, that's it - the little places we've yet to discover.

      when I wrote this one, I thought it might be too simple and bland. glad it's faring better than I thought it might. :)

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    2. Multilayered and thoughtful.
      Adelaide

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