Thursday, March 5, 2015

A child's words; so small

a child's words
gator, monster, blue
scribbled 
on notepaper
in the waiting room

Skylark, 2:2, Winter 2014

so small ...
but only a neutrino
can pass through
this universe
unscathed

—Skylark, 2:2, Winter 2014

The second one represents a slight departure for me.

8 comments:

  1. These are both powerful, poignant poems and they really enhance each other paired this way. Some of your best!

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    1. Thanks, Jenny. I had "accidentally" sent these to Skylark at the same time and they (along with another one) were printed in Skylark together. Oddly, I didn't notice how they worked together until now, when I was picking out tanka to post here.

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  2. They do work really well together--I love the Japanese forms, and even though lately I have been writing in longer forms, I really have a special place in my heart for the shorter forms--

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    1. Thanks, Gail and Audrey!
      Someday I intend to get back to longer verse, but I can't quite seem to pull away from tanka. I think I like writing about the little "moments."

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  3. Though sad, these do go so well together. Well done!

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  4. Yes, these tanka do go together, beautifully. They both evoke a sense of wonder and fragility . . . but also, that deep-seated, lurking human suspicion that there is uncertainty (and, perhaps, even risk) in the very act of simply: existing.

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    1. Happy for your comments, J and W!
      I like your insightfulness, W: the uncertainty or risk in the act of simply existing.

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