Friday, June 26, 2015

Silence; by my knee

silence
follows me around
at my heels
in midday sun
a field of white stars

Moonbathing, 12, June 2015


by my knee
a soft thud and rustle—
I pause
to take another look
at an ugly brown bug

Skylark, 3:1, Summer 2015


11 comments:

  1. A beautiful pairing that showcases your talent for noticing, in the small and the silent , the deeply significant.

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  2. thanks, jenny, for the v. thoughtful comment.

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  3. Two very cool renderings of summer quiet and sound. The pieces work together well. " in midday sun a field of white stars" - is simply: lovely, Janet.

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  4. thanks, wendy!
    P.S. I noticed you have a tanka in American Tanka. your poem is really very good. congrats! glad you decided to try your hand at the form. you're already doing well! (and if you want to continue your tanka journey, check out the Tanka Society of America. gotta give them a plug!)

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    1. Thanks, Janet. As you know, I’ve tried my hand at a number of poetry forms and, I think, I learn something new each time. I’ve been reading your tanka for, I think, at least a couple of years now, and your wonderful work has made an impression. I’m probably guilty of being inclined, often, to “over shoot” and head for the big “DUH-DAH!!!” finish, when I compose, but reading your tanka got through to me that, this was a poetry form where I had to get into a whole different head space … into a moment really, and observe and explore the nuances, there. Thank you, so much. You are a good teacher.

      Actually, after American Tanka accepted my submission, I was so delighted (to say nothing of “floored”) that I promptly applied to become a member of the Tanka Society of America (and I’m waiting on them to get back to me on that).

      Thank you for nurturing and encouraging the writing of tanka and for your ongoing support, without which, I probably never would have found my way to this lovely form, on my own.

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    2. You've made my day with your reply, Wendy. I agree: writing tanka seems to require "getting into a whole different head space." One reason I continue to write them (though I'd LIKE to also manage to venture into other forms) is to help me be more attuned to the small moments in life - what's present. AT is pretty hard to get into, so again, congrats! Delighted you've applied to join the TSA; Kathabela W. should get back with you soon. Soon you'll discover the many tanka voices and styles; mine is but one!

      P.S. I admire your attention to detail, and your subtle sense of humor, in your poems - also your ability to tackle so many different forms.

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    3. P.S., Wendy: Jennifer W hasn't been around, or posting on her own blog, for a long time. Hope she's doing okay. Do you know?

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    4. She's taking a break from blogging for a few months, but plans on getting back into it, at some point ... hopefully in the not-to-distant future ... her poetry and her comments, on the work of others, are a lovely treat!

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    5. Thanks! Everyone needs a break! Yes, she's a bright spot, isn't she?

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  5. Great read, thanks for sharing that.

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    1. Thank you, blogoratti, for stopping by and for your kind comment.

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