Thursday, October 22, 2015

The one time

the one time
my father saw his father
       ... from afar
too hard to decipher
the character lines

A Hundred Gourds, 4:4, Sept. 2015

5 comments:

  1. What a sad and poignant middle-of-the-story, especially with the unexpected line 3 pivot. Very effective.

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  2. Thanks, Jenny and Audrey.
    My father was a child at the time; from afar, when they were downtown, my grandmother pointed his father out to him.

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  3. This beautifully evokes those wisps (often mysteriously achy wisps) of childhood memories that are fleeting, somewhat ethereal - and yet - so haunting ... the last two lines, especially. A poignant story

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    1. Nice to see you again, Wendy, and thanks.

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