Tuesday, April 19, 2016

Early spring

early spring 
the soft growth of antlers ...
a chill
each time my eyes meet his
on the hunter's trophy

Skylark (a "Skylark's Nest" runner-up), 3:2, Winter 2015

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  1. The delicate sense of rebirth conveyed in the first two lines contrasts powerfully with the last two. An intense - and very moving - tanka, Janet.

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    2. I did not intend to remove my comment, just reword it. These trophies are sad to see. How can anyone be proud of killing a deer, except if it is needed for food?

      Adelaide

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    3. thanks, wendy.

      thanks, adelaide. I'm always bothered by those trophies.

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  2. Whew. This one has such a powerful turn.

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  3. Oh this one gets me--beautifully penned though

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  4. Thank you for visiting and commenting, Jennifer and Audrey.

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