Shop of scents
each soap
a piece of artwork …
part of me knows
the sculpted designs
will in time wash away
a fresh spray
of "triple cool mint"—
this desire
to smell like a patch
of garden herbs
"lavender silk"
for experienced skin ...
I buy a bar,
trusting the store clerk
to keep my secret
—red lights, vol. 12, no. 1, January 2016
This shop is in San Luis Obispo, California.

This is brilliant - just wonderful, Janet. I've been trying to write a few tanka sequences, but I do find them challenging. That connective quality can be so elusive.
ReplyDeleteSuch a lovely form - when done well, though. And this is so-o-o-o good. And those little touches of humor: AWESOME!!!
Wow, thanks for the boost, Wendy. But I don't know… There are various kinds of sequences and sets and different ways to connect the tanka within them. I think after reading a lot of them, I must mainly just go with my gut.
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DeleteWhat a charming sequence! I second Wendy's comment about the touches of humor.
ReplyDeleteHi, Jenny…thanks!!
DeleteI loved the last one especially--these are wonderful!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Audrey. Glad you enjoyed this!
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