Saturday, May 14, 2016

Tanka sequence










Shop of scents 

each soap 
a piece of artwork … 
part of me knows
the sculpted designs 
will in time wash away

a fresh spray 
of "triple cool mint"— 
this desire 
to smell like a patch 
of garden herbs 

"lavender silk" 
for experienced skin ... 
I buy a bar, 
trusting the store clerk 
to keep my secret 

red lights vol. 12, no. 1, January 2016

This shop is in San Luis Obispo, California.

7 comments:

  1. This is brilliant - just wonderful, Janet. I've been trying to write a few tanka sequences, but I do find them challenging. That connective quality can be so elusive.

    Such a lovely form - when done well, though. And this is so-o-o-o good. And those little touches of humor: AWESOME!!!

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    1. Wow, thanks for the boost, Wendy. But I don't know… There are various kinds of sequences and sets and different ways to connect the tanka within them. I think after reading a lot of them, I must mainly just go with my gut.

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  2. What a charming sequence! I second Wendy's comment about the touches of humor.

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  3. I loved the last one especially--these are wonderful!

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    1. Thanks, Audrey. Glad you enjoyed this!

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